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Friday 31 May 2019

Octopus vs scuba diver

When I was getting eaten by  a octopus I poop my pants.Because I was scert. It tryed  to eat my head but benaiah was. There benaiah was just look and look intall. I said something and then he finally got it off! Me. The octopus was slimy and sticky. By the way we were in the sea. The end bye.
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  1. Miss Rowland24 June 2019 at 16:45

    Kia Ora Brodie! Well done for using describing words about the octopus. Next time I think you should read your work out loud to decide where the full stops can go. Can't wait to read more of your writing!

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